9/30/2010 and 10/01/2010

Today was the last day to bring in the two articles and the extras we found some articles that where interesting

Title Author Source
"Redefining Revision for Freshmen" David L. Wallace and JSTOR
John R. Hayes

"Coherence, Cohesion, and Writing Stephen P. Witte; Lester Faigley JSTOR
Quality"

"4 Deadly Errors of Teaching Writing" Andrew Pudewa excellence in
writing.com

"Helping Students use Textual Sources Margaret Kantz JSTOR
Persuasively"

"Students Preference on Online Yu-Fen Yang web
Self-Writer and Peer Review to Improve
Writing"

Tuesday turn in Annotated Bibliography before class Google Docs(the 6 articles you got MLA format) and be prepared to take notes on due dates and process for The Revision Guide

Have a safe weekend.

Part two of articles in Categories

This is a continuation of the other categories in case anybody wants to read up on them.

OUTSIDE FACTORS
"Writing Strategies for Students with Emotional and Behavioral Disorders"- C.M. Morris

"Teacher Feedback Writing Assignment...Revision in Lower and Higher Acheving high-schools"-Rosa Valdes

STUDENT ROLE
"Redefining Revision for Freshmen"-David L. Wallace and John R. Hayes

TECHNOLOGY
"How EFL University Students use Electronic Peer Response into Revisions"-Wang Song and Siriluck Usaha

"Integrated Word Processing Skills with Revision Skills"-Erna Kelly and Donna Raleigh

AUDIENCE/ROLE
"Proof-Revising with podcasting: Keeping Readers in Mind as Students Listen to and Rethink their Writing"

Agustin Munoz

September 28, 2010
Just letting everyone know that thrusdays bring in last articles for class.  Today was the same as thrusday of last week so just as a reminder
todays articels to choose from:
Teacher roles
"the concept of controlin teachers response: Defining the varicities of Directive and facilitative commentary"
By rechard Straub
"Responding to student writing"
by Nancy Sommers-Jstor
"Helping young writers to revise: a brief for teacher"
By Jill Fitzgerald-Jstor

Student Role
"the experience of the revising for essay type exammination: different between first and fourth year univesity student"
By E. Kara Giannopouiou
"Speaking my mind"
by Conrad Geller-Jstor
"Teaching children about revision in writing"
By jill Fitzgerald and Lynda-Jstor

Writing Process
"revision in the writing process
by Fran Lehr-some where in the web
"understanding composing"
by Sondra perl-Jstor
Sorry for any missed speled word or anything you may not understand, but i typed what i saw on the broad
thank you for today

9/28/10

The teacher reminded students to bring in the last articles on Thursday 9/30.

Paragraphs need to be our own words; works cited in MLA format, alphabetized order.

Today's class session we reviewed the articles brought in today.

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1.) Feedback - Helping young writers revise a brief review for teachers.
by Jill Fitzgerald. Source: Jstore

2.) Peer Review - Training students to become resourceful peer reviewers.
by Hui-Tzumn. Source: Academic Search Complete

3.) Technique Strategy - Motivating middle school students to revise and edit.
by Angela M. Comer Source: Jstore

4.) Model Theories - Ease tension in your mind, take a breath, draw a good picture in your mind about the piece you are revising.
by Karen Ernstdasilva Source: Academic Search Complete

Article sources: board 3

Outside Factors/Influences:

N/A

Teacher Role:

1.) "The interaction of Instruction, Teacher Comment, and Revision in Teaching the Composing Process"

-George Hillocks, University of Chicago |JSTOR.org

2.) "Improving our Responds to Student Writing: A Process-Orientated Approach"

-Leanard A. & Joanne M. Podis |JSTOR.org

3.) "Helping Young Writers to Revise: A Brief Review for Teachers"

-Jill Fitzgerald |JSTOR.org

4.) "Responding to Student Writing"

-Nancy Sommers |JSTOR.org

Student Role:

N/A

9/23/2010 class 10:45 to 11:50

Here articles we found Thursday

Feedback

-"Nurturing thoughtful revision using the focused question card strategy", By: Alexa Sandmann, Source: Academic Search Complete

-"Focusing on form: Student engagement with teacher feedback", By: Fiona Hyland

Strategies Techniques

-"Understanding Composing" By: Sondra, Source: JSTOR

-"Rewriting is the essence of writing well-where the game is won or lost" By: William Zinsser, Source: University of North Carolina , the writing center

-"Enhancing two related thought processes: Revision in writing & critical reading" By: Jill Fitzgerald

-"What did I change & why did I do it? young writers revision practices", By: Stephanie Dix, Source: EBSCO

-"Demonstrating techniques for assessing writing in the writing conference", By: Richard Brach, Source: JSTOR

Peer Review

-"I like it the way it is"; Peer-Revision writing strategies for students w/ Emotional & Behavioral Disorders", By: Corinne M. Morris Kindzierski, Source: EBSCO

-"Structured peer collaboration: Teaching Essay Revision to College students needing writing remediation" By: Kimberly Kinsler, Source: JSTOR

Good luck...

Articles of Revision

I decided to name my title "Articles of Revision" because it kind of sounds like "Articles of Confederation" which I thought sounded kind of cool haha. Alright so I personally decided to volunteer to post a few articles that have to deal with revision because im such a good classmate and love helping out my other fellow classmates. Also I would like to add I love Dr.Philips, shes such a good teacher by the way :) Its not even my turn to post till like late October but here it goes.

1- Problems/Issues

- " What will labeling the part of speech ever do for me? " by Melissa J.Engel
- " Barriers and Strategies to the revision process from an Editors Perspective " by Daniel D.Moos & Peggy Hawkins

2- Strategies/Techniques

- " Nurturing thoughtful revision using the focused question card strategy " by Alexa Sandman
- " Revising during writing in a second grade classroom " by Samuel A.Perez

3- Feedback

- " Students perception of written teacher comments : What do they say about how we revision to them? " by B.Bardine
- " Feedback and revision in writing across the curriculum classes " by Larry Beason
- " How EFL University students use electronic peer response into revisions " by Wang Song & Siriluck Usaha

4-Role of Instructor

- " Helping young writers to revise : A breef review for teachers " by Lety Gerald

5- Observation from students

- " Topping the subconscious to free the writing and the writer . Your future self helping you write, what you couldnt see in the final draft " by ???

6- Technology

- " The effects of word processing on student writing quality and revision strategies " by Ronald D. Owston



Alright guys those were all the articles written on the board in class. If any seems a little weird thank Rene for his ugly hand writing that I couldnt read or missing details for example an author, sorry. But if anything guys just look up names or titles and Im sure you will find them. Im glad to help you guys out and I hope we can all help each other out to get A's in this class! Have a safe weekend, dont drink to much, and be sure to bring 2 more articles for Tuesday! See you then

Hey guys so today we just talked about the articles we found and we wrote a couple of them down that seem helpful.

Technology
Which do students prefer to evaluate their essays: Peers or computer programs
Author: Yi-hsiu, Lai Source: Wilson web

Misc.
Editorial: History-"Half is revision" by Dean R. Cooledge
Source: EBSCO

"Feedback and Revision in writing across the curriculm classes"
By: Larry Beason
Source: JSTOR

Models/Theories
Redifing revision for freshmen
By: David L. Wallace and John R. Hayes
Source: JSTOR

Tuesday, September 21, 2010

Today she went over the handout she gave us about the annotated bibliography and revision guide. (Project two) She talked about tips on how you can find the articles you needed to bring; search the internet, use the authors for references. Also when searching for your articles use the seven other articles we read for a basis search. She also posted an example of the annotation bibliography on the class blog. She mentioned some things when you write your annotation Don’t write what you see on the paper write it in your Own words and follow the example on the blog regarding the format.

Dates to Remember: Thursday Sep. 23 – bring the two articles to class (for extra credit bring the annotations for those articles as well)
Tuesday Oct. 5 – Final annotation draft due.

Thursday, September 16, 2010

Hey guys, this post is for the class of Thursday, September 16. Dr. Phillips had a class dicussion with us about the last two articles that were due (Treglia, Bardine & Fulton). She also went over the upcoming Project 2. For next class on Tuesday, she will explain further more. So, be prepared to recieve the new project information. The next assignment will be due next Thursday. If you would like to get ahead for any reason on this homework assignment, you will have to:

• find 2 academical articles of revision.
• You can research online using the UTPA library website using the online resources link.
• You may also look for articles using the regular web.

TIPS:

• In order to find revison articles easier, you can look at the resources the authors in the previous 7 articles we read. They contain plenty.
• Look for other articles under the name of the authors of the 7 articles we read also. They might have written more than one essay or work on revision.

Once you have found your two articles, again they are due until next Thursday, think about how you will categorize your list of sources. For example, you can categorize your articles by feedback, attitude, strategies, and techniques. Dr. Phillips will give us the complete information on this project on Tuesday.

Next, we began our class dicussion on how feedback has affected our writing and our experiences with feedback. We first went over Treglia's article. Here are the notes:

Teacher Feedback

• Migitated commentary
• Time is factor/students may not have time to revise their work
• Article is about face-to-face interaction
• There must be a relationship between the student and teacher
• The writer must also have the right attitude in order to have a conversation on feedback.

Feedback comments can be:

• hedge comments
• rubber-stamp ones
• suggestive
• directive
• vauge
• praise

Feedback can be summary communication vs. formative feedback. Most students in class preferred formative feedback because the teacher will emphasize on how the student can improve their work.

Next, we went over Bardine & Fulton's article...the notes are:

Self-Reflection

• Self-reflection is seen as a recursive model of thinking.
• It can be similiar to dialougtic talk-backs which are also mentioned in the Dix & Fuldoon articles. You can read to compare.

We did not get to discuss more, but I'm sure she will further more explain. See you next class!!

Tuesday September 14

Hey guy for those who couldn't make it to class or just forgot what we cover in class, here it is what we cover in class on tuesday:

1. We review previous papers talked about egocentrism and willingness of working with critics and revision.


2. Went over an example of a student's final paper and his experience in taking this course.


3. We also talked discuss both articles starting with Stephanie Dix

Student 1

• He was an example of recursive model where he writes and know before hand what's next.

• He also kept in mind the rhetorical triangle

Student 2

• She used a cognative process model (writen ideas in her head with text). This could be compare to Problem Solving Model("Fix").
• Proble Solving Model- to make sure the writing is in line with the message.
  

Student 3

• He was an example of Proofreading and the idea of linear approach.

4. Nancy Sommers in Revision Strategies

• Cognative thinking
• Recursive

Revision=Discovery

• Linear Model- have the point of what your writing beforehand

5. Compare and Contrast

Last but not least while reading all seven articles we should keep in mind

1. Models or Philosophies (What are they suggesting?)
2. Definitions and Strategies/Techniques (Do they work or no?)
3. Students and Instructors and the role/responsability/ influence each play in revision process.

Next articles are Article six (Treglia) and seven comparison (Bardine and Fulton)

Outlines are due before class on Thursday September 16

P.S.

Dr. Phillips did took row in class :)

Tuesday September 14th

Today's articles are by Stephanie Dix and Nancy Sommers.

Don't forget to upload your outlines before class.

Thursday Sept. 9th class notes

started off class talking about fantasy football, and we all hoped Penn State beat Alabama which they didnt =/

dont be rude in your emails to Dr. phillips

role was taken

Fitzgeral and Muldoon articles were discussed

talked about the differences between Editing and Revision we made a t-chart to discuss the differences.

used the rhetoric triangle and rhombus

Tuesday, September 7th, 2010

1.Today, we reviewed how send documents to Dr. Phillips. Here are the steps;
- Log in to your Gmail account
- Click on "Account"
- Click on "Docs"
- Click on "Upload" on the left-hand side
- Select "File to upload"
- Select the file you want to upload
- Click on "Back to Google Docs" and you should see the document you selected
- Click on the document and press "Share" on the right-hand side
- Click on "Share Settings" and then press "Change"
- Change it to "Anyone with link" and save it
- At the bottom box where it says "Add people" type in phillipssk@utpa.edu
- Press "Share"

2. We also went over the first article that was assigned and discussed the 6 topics we had to write about

3. The next article (there are 2) are due before class on Thursday via Gmail and we have to do 2 separate outlines for each one, both with the same 6 topics as the first one.